Drugs did
this to her. They made her like this. Mad, unhappy and unfriendly. I had never
thought that she would come so far. We started to smoke normal cigarettes. Then
we began to smoke weed and then the hard drugs came in. We got tired of weed, literally.
We wanted some drugs who could take us
to paradise, and that paradise was not as good as we thought. Now she is at the
mental hospital, what a paradise. She will never be the same again. Drugs did
this.
This is great!
ReplyDeleteEventhough it was short it was great!
Like the way that you make an cycle and ending the story with the same sentence that you start with.
And like the way that you put paradise into it all and kinda like say.. "What is paradise?"
what he said, awesome and terrible at same time
ReplyDeleteA very effective story, short and to the point. Nice effect with the contrasts in your language. However, you also have a few mistakes. But a very nice touch to come "full circle" in the end.
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