Car trip to Harzen
We have been looking forward to this trip for several of months. We were 4 guys who wanted to drink some beers therefore we took a “beertrip” through Germany. Firstly we started in Holbæk, and we drove on the road for several hours, to our second destination – the German border. Here we bought a lot of German beers. Moreover we also bought some “karrywursts” with “sauerkraut” furthermore there were also carry ketchup. Our next destination was Reeperbahn in Hamburg – in addition Reeperbahn is a famous bar street in Hamburg. There we were drinking beers and having fun! We had a lot of fun, however we got some seriously “hangovers”.
So if you want to go out with some of your friends, we will say that Hamburg is a lovely city to visit. Firstly because it is a city with many shops and bars. And secondly because the over there are very kindly. Then we wanted to see some other things we Germany, and as you know there is a lot of beautiful attractions, so we couldn’t agree about a destination. But in the end our friend Lasse decided that the next destination before Harzen should be: “Hannover Autoshow” we all were ready for that, because...You know guys! So we drove down there and as we came to the city, we could see a lot of different beautiful cars. Not just normal cars, there were old, new, expensive, cheap etc. We stayed there the whole day, and it was VERY interesting and funny. So if you love cars and like good food, then you have to visit “Hannover Autoshow”. Our next and last destination was Harzen. The district was very beautiful, and it must have been beautiful because we telling this, because as we said before we are guys.
We don’t think that a flower or just something that looks like is beautiful, but this district was.
We stayed here for a week, and we lived in a good house, and we had a terrific time. We drank, went out on experience trips, chilled, and a lot other things.
In conclusion of our whole trip, we can conclude that Germany is a wonderful country to visit!
I am not entirely sure I would want to go on the same trip - not with the hangovers you describe. But other guys - or beer/car lovers - might be tempted :-)
ReplyDeleteYou could have used a larger variety of discourse markers for adding information, but otherwise it is ok. You remember to round off using a conclusive discourse marker - good!
However, you do have some linguistic mistakes which an extra proof-reading might have eliminated.