It is the
14th of February, also known as the valentines day. The school is
decorated with tons of red balloons, red hearts and love-music is playing
on the speakers. Everyone are in a
lovely mood.
I see the couples kissing in the halls, love is all around. Me my self, a senior girl on my third year in high school. I have for a long time been looking forward to this day. I’m exiting and so ready for it. I have for a long time kept an eye on an older guy from the school. He actually don’t know how much I really like him. I haven’t really got the chance to talk to him yet, so I see this day as a big opportunity to ask him out. His name is Jack, and he is a very mysterious guy. There has been a lot of talk about him in the town, and at the school. Therefore my parents do not like him, but I finds it interesting. I like the mysterious about him. I’m so exiting to finally talk to him. I am kind of addicted to him in a special way. I like what is forbidden and the things other people is afraid or scared of. So, I invite him to my valentine party tonight. I decorate the house when I went back from school and the guests will be here in a few minutes. A few hours later, all the gest has arrived. We are having a good time. We have been eating a good meal and been drinking some good drinks. I have a good eye contact with Jack – so I decide to go over and ask him to go upstairs, I want him on my own!!!
There we are – just a few seconds later, lying in the bed with the arms around each other. Jack kisses my lips and it feels so good. I feel like I’m in heaven. Suddenly he lies on top of me, and hold me so tight that it almost hurts. I wasn’t thinking, I just thought he must like it rough.
He squeezes me harder and harder, and it actually turned me on. ''You smell good'' he said, and licked my neck. Suddenly I felt something strange. I took my hand up to my neck, and then I looked at it. It was bloody. I looked up at Jack, and saw his eyes has changed from green to blood red color.
I see the couples kissing in the halls, love is all around. Me my self, a senior girl on my third year in high school. I have for a long time been looking forward to this day. I’m exiting and so ready for it. I have for a long time kept an eye on an older guy from the school. He actually don’t know how much I really like him. I haven’t really got the chance to talk to him yet, so I see this day as a big opportunity to ask him out. His name is Jack, and he is a very mysterious guy. There has been a lot of talk about him in the town, and at the school. Therefore my parents do not like him, but I finds it interesting. I like the mysterious about him. I’m so exiting to finally talk to him. I am kind of addicted to him in a special way. I like what is forbidden and the things other people is afraid or scared of. So, I invite him to my valentine party tonight. I decorate the house when I went back from school and the guests will be here in a few minutes. A few hours later, all the gest has arrived. We are having a good time. We have been eating a good meal and been drinking some good drinks. I have a good eye contact with Jack – so I decide to go over and ask him to go upstairs, I want him on my own!!!
There we are – just a few seconds later, lying in the bed with the arms around each other. Jack kisses my lips and it feels so good. I feel like I’m in heaven. Suddenly he lies on top of me, and hold me so tight that it almost hurts. I wasn’t thinking, I just thought he must like it rough.
He squeezes me harder and harder, and it actually turned me on. ''You smell good'' he said, and licked my neck. Suddenly I felt something strange. I took my hand up to my neck, and then I looked at it. It was bloody. I looked up at Jack, and saw his eyes has changed from green to blood red color.
The branches outside tapped on the
window.
I did not response, before I felt Jack’s teeth in my neck and my eyes got blurry. The last thing I saw was light .. Light of life.
I did not response, before I felt Jack’s teeth in my neck and my eyes got blurry. The last thing I saw was light .. Light of life.
Good story. However, one might argue that your introduction is a bit long, leaving one waiting for the horror elements/the suspense. But a well-written ending, and especially good with your final words: the light of life, which form an interesting contrast to the act (dying) ;-))
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