My summer holiday
In my summer holiday I did not do much, I spent most my time at work actually.
The only week I had off duty I spent with my family in Legoland in Billund. I drove to Billund with my sister’s boyfriend, Daniel, because I had been at work when the others went off, but luckily Daniel had also been at work, so we took the trip down there a few hours later than the rest of them.
We were only in Legoland for two days, but it was a nice trip. The first day it was rainy at we spend the day doing most of the indoor attractions. The new indoor ride they made was a shooting game where you had to work with one other to score as many points as you possibly could from shooting some small lights with a laser beam. My dad and I almost set the highest score of the day, missing only 20 points to beat the previous set score.
We also tried the PowerBuilder many times, and my little brother got a picture of me and him and I just after we had finished a combination they said was the wildest one. So that is basically what I did in my summer holiday.
Very nice language.
ReplyDeleteHowever, some mistakes:
at - and?,
spend - spent, doing most of the attractions (very informal, re-phrase), one other - someone else/another person, previous set - previously set, me and him and I (proof-reading), not of me though - not by me though.